17A – Elevator Pitch No. 2

https://youtu.be/6fK2BLEE8gA

2) I was not able to submit my first elevator speech due to the fact that I was extremely sick at the time. However, I was able to show that first speech to several of my classmates so they could give me some proper feedback for my second elevator speech. Essentially, what stood out to me as most important is to speak loudly and confidently in order to effectively engage your target audience. The feedback that surprised me the most was when a classmate suggested for me to seem more passionate about what I am talking about during my pitch. Moreover, I did not think that there was any feedback that was necessarily silly or outright wrong, as well. Ultimately, the feedback that I though was most useful and insightful was when my classmates suggested the notion that I give off an impression of supreme confidence and consistently use my hands while talking and making valid points throughout the course of my elevator speech.

3) Based on the feedback that I received from my fellow classmates, I did make some minor changes to my second elevator speech. Some of these changes include: speaking more loudly and confidently in regard to my business idea, using my hands while speaking out loud, sounding much more passionate and enthusiastic in regard to my concept, and making consistent eye contact with the camera throughout the entirety of the pitch, as well.